12-20-2011, 02:21 AM
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12-20-2011, 04:38 AM
honestly, i think you have some good ideas, but work on your word choice, as there are some large cliché/outmeal words/phrases that could be better used. I think if you went back and tried to improve the wordchoice, it could be a fairly well written poem.
decided to write a quick poem myself
[spoiler="yay"]
[voice="deep dramatic"]
A vast land of infinite possibilities
Awaiting the chosen hand to step forward
And claim its rightful place in the world.
A world in which chaos reigns
The weak grow to the strong as
The chain of power continues
A deathless body that cannot be escaped
The adventure endlessly continuing
Only the strong, the witty can survive.
The gods of the land refined
Unite to enforce reason
To the senseless hordes of the world (hint hint)
Thee who walks upon this land
Can never go back
As no one leaves…
unchanged.[/voice]
*heavy metal music plays loudly*
ORCWORMS SERVER!!!
YEAAAAAA!
[/spoiler]
decided to write a quick poem myself
[spoiler="yay"]
[voice="deep dramatic"]
A vast land of infinite possibilities
Awaiting the chosen hand to step forward
And claim its rightful place in the world.
A world in which chaos reigns
The weak grow to the strong as
The chain of power continues
A deathless body that cannot be escaped
The adventure endlessly continuing
Only the strong, the witty can survive.
The gods of the land refined
Unite to enforce reason
To the senseless hordes of the world (hint hint)
Thee who walks upon this land
Can never go back
As no one leaves…
unchanged.[/voice]
*heavy metal music plays loudly*
ORCWORMS SERVER!!!
YEAAAAAA!
[/spoiler]
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